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Question: Just another random rhyme!.!.!. anyone think it's any good!?
I can't stop dropping poetry
show a piece of my inner lyrical beast
when an opinion or two is unleashed
working on serving a few spiritual feasts
my name got hot, and i started sensing haters
at the same time those who caught the vapors
since i was battle-rapping myself and all takers
a reader told me i had lost my first battle
my opponent claimed it was "pre-written"
had me thinking, repect for the rhyme wasn't hidden
i wrote an insulting short story's worth of bull-shiddin
i noted, afterwards; for sure, it was nothing but word-play
then, i get internet threats like sombody wants to hurt me
so now i harass the poetry section with rebellious rhymes!.!.!.
honestly, not thinking the petty hip-hop section was worthy
so, i wrote for a few the fans that paid attention
chased by damaged pride of hip-hop henchmen
thanks, for welcoming me back!.!.!. i thought i'd mention
doing the same, for those who spent time reading
playing with words, having fun
that's the reason i come backWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Actually, I think you have terrific potential!. Keep track of your rhythm, though!. To gain respect as a Poet, this is crucial!. The respect for the Art of Communication is dismally lacking of late, so I'm pleased you have a grasp of what's at stake!. Read the poets of the 'beat' generation: Bukowski, Ferlinghetti, Ciardi, ee Cummings, not for content, necessarily, but as a primer for the meter & the rhythm!. Without meter & rhythm, it's just prose, after all!. And if it has no point or conclusion, then it's just rambling!. You've got skill here - try haiku!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Because I'm so into classic poetic form and content, I find your stream-of-consciousness poetry a relief--like taking a dip in a cool lake on a hot day!. I enjoy the unbridled flow of words, especially when there are no obscenities involved!. (Sorry, but I'm a bit old-fashioned)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it - sounded like it could be a rap song - I had fun!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like the obscurity of your rhyme!. entertaining!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is very good!. Have a star!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A nice flow to your words!. That aint bull-shidden! Like that word!.Www@QuestionHome@Com