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Position:Home>Poetry> Looking for comments on my poem, 10 quick points for most detailed?Question: Looking for comments on my poem, 10 quick points for most detailed!? Here it is:
If I live for love And love is my life And I have no love Then am I alive!? If my life is hers And she is not mine Then do I have a life at all!? If she is my purpose But has no purpose for me Then why do I exist!? If she is my everything But to her I am nothing Then what am I!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: your in love bro!. but the girl you love or like dont know that you do like her thats why you wrote this poem because the real thing is you cant tell her what you really feel for her you already loose the race without even starting your engine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like your poem, but, I believe we write about specific things that are on our mind or are troublesome to us and I think you are in pain!. Nobody is more important than our own self!. You have to learn to love yourself!. With that you will able to choose wisely who you want to get involved with!. You need the ability to not get yourself in a position or allow your feelings or emotions to rule your choices!. Think hard before getting involved!. Know the person!. Sorry I couldn't help but examine why you wrote your poem!. Live for loving yourself first! You are obviously a special person, tell yourself that all of the time!Www@QuestionHome@Com I don't really worry too much about points at this stage ! Details !? Not very original or inspiring !.I'm afraid !.!.even the Beatles did better Not what I call a poem !.!.but then , I prefer T S Eliot or Yeats !.!. by: W!. B!. Yeats (1865-1939): DANCE there upon the shore; What need have you to care For wind or water's roar!? And tumble out your hair That the salt drops have wet; Being young you have not known The fool's triumph, nor yet Love lost as soon as won, Nor the best labourer dead And all the sheaves to bind!. What need have you to dread The monstrous crying of wind!? I guess I won't get the points !! Too bad!Www@QuestionHome@Com that is the pain of 'love'!. lol, I have come to believe in my short life time that most people DONT know what real love is any more, but I see in this that you have been hit head on by the love arrow!!=) awesome poem, it flowed really nicely 10-10!!Www@QuestionHome@Com i loved it b/c one line is described by the other it has a deeper meaning that i loved and i loved the way u finished with a question so 10 out of 10 its awsomeWww@QuestionHome@Com A frustrated bachelor!. If ones pens a poem with abstractness and offers prizes do we answer!? And if we choose will he understand!? Now that's abstract!Www@QuestionHome@Com I really like that 2nd stanza 2nd line doesn't: And her's is not mine make more sense!?Www@QuestionHome@Com then why do you live for love!?Www@QuestionHome@Com |