Tell me what you think about this poem?

Question: Tell me what you think about this poem!?

I wrote this to a girl but she did not say she liked it but she also did not say she didnt like it!. She just never commented on it!.
I want to know your honest opinion!. Thx!.

One day I was walking through my garden full of weeds
and biting flying insects when I glimpsed at a young beautiful flower!.
It was not there before!. The flower pulled at my heart and I was changed forever!.
Never again will I see the garden the same again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I love the concept! Truly like what you are trying to express but you need to work on your word flow!. It's not really a poem !.!.!.more like a short story!. For example: too wordy when you say biting and flying!.!.!.!.pick one or the other!. And last sentence would read better if you said " My garden is forever changed!." or something like that!.!.!.!.using the word "again" twice makes it clumsy!. hope this helps!. Still really like what you are trying to communicate!. good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

its ok bt careful bcz can be vvvv embarrassing 4 girl sometimesWww@QuestionHome@Com

wooow!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is very sweet, but not very poem like!. Maybe put more verses into it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Keep going to schoolWww@QuestionHome@Com

its okay
make it rhyme itd be really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

its nice!. read it to her,!.!. she will be happy!.!.lol:-DWww@QuestionHome@Com