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Question: Do you like my poem!? I call it "Killing The Only Thing That Holds You"!?
Remember how young we were,
How madly we loved,
How easily we bled,
How quietly we screamed!.
Remember who we were,
And now look at who we are,
This is our life,
Is this really who we wanted to be !?
You will never walk alone,
My pain and misery will always follow you,
God will never give you anything you cant handle,
But no one cares when you scream in hell!.
A place for smiling,
Is now a place of dieing,
Remember the first time,
For the last time,
Now you are killing the only thing that holds you!.
By:
FREAK SHOW
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i felt this person's desperation, and pain, their lonilness and , gut wrenching pain!.
"Now you are killing the only thing that holds you!." is that saying his / her beloved is a murderer!?
How did they murder this person!?
If you're trying to get a poem that conveys someone's inner agony, and grief beyond words , you have done it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Freak Show:
The first part is about memories
because remember how young we were
how madly we loved
How easily we bled
How quietly we screamed
Then the remembering of our identities
as well as life
Now its the part of making decisions
because the line is this who one wants to be
God says he will be with you
and will walk with you
for you won't be alone
He won't give stress ( anything one can't handle )
I am thinking this is about making decisions
some right some not
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This is really awesome and i loved it so much!.You really have a way to write your poetry with so much feelings and to the bone honesty !.!.I would say it's a 10/ 10Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am not a fan of it because I couldn't break it!. I've written and copy-written many pieces but this one is different!. Keep writing though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The two poems that I've read by you have been so dark, but extremely well-written!. I'll admit, some happier tunes would be nice, but I'm not complaining!. Great job, 10/10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A Nice offering, and you do show talewnt, that with work and over time will see you perhaps as a top rate poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The hell part i think is too strong also i think you should add more on the last paragraph!. It was okay!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love this it is so real!.i rate it 100% out of100% it is so good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
?t is not a poem!.!.!. It is a quarrel!.!.!.!.in which only one person speaks!.!.!. That is why your grade is 5/100!.!.!. I am realistic sometimes!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com
Quite an expression of feelings even though it's dark!.It's well written!.Good job! I give you a 9 out of ten!.Www@QuestionHome@Com