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Question: A poem from long ago, rewritten!. Is it ok!.!?
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No one listens to the children,
their words are not believed!.
Our children speak the truth,
adults tell self serving awful lies!.

Children forced into perversion
no one listens to their calls!.
Broken limbs and busted hearts,
our kids are being slaughtered!.

It happens almost every single day,
names are way too many to report!.
Children, our most precious resource,
losing them to the twisted and the sick!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Even when the children are bruised and beaten, some broken and dead, we refuse to listen!. I write poetry for the families of victims!. They remain in denial, such a sad state of affairs!. A true genius of a write Steve!. From one who knows!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The following is by Leonard Nemoy

I am still a child
Thrilled by a surprise
Touched by a bird's song
Delighted by a clown
Frightened by hatred
Hurt by rejection
Saddened by pain
Warmed by love!.
--------------------------------------!.!.!.
To hurt a helpless child, one must have had the same abuse
and or is totally insane from birth, or using drugs!.
We hear too many stories of tragic abuse, much too many!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

O_O i have a similar poem but in spanish!. It's also about children and violence!. Your poem is beautiful and so straight foward!.
My one is called la imaginacion: Una bella escapatoria (Imagination: a beautiful escape)!.
Awesome keep it up!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dark Prince, I like what jenny wrote! I like the meaning of your poem! It inspired me to, at least, think about writing a poem concerning children!. Thanks! Edit!. I think your grammatical errors spoken of are in the last verse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Children - however they are mistreated - are easy targets for the psychological bullies!. It is sad that conditions exist that allow child abuse can go on so long without detection!. These children become the adults of the future - may God give them comfort!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't go torturing children when their young
Don't destroy your world, and then leave them none
Don't teach them to hate, and then give them a gun
Or they won't be no fun, anymore!.!.!.!.!.

But if they wanna change!.!.!.to butterfly's!.!.!.
Let em!.!.!.!.just let em!.!.!.!.and don't forget emWww@QuestionHome@Com

Put simply, the parents of such ill-treated children need to be incarcerated!. But there's just too much wrong with our society to even begin that undertaking!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

so true so true !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. I think it is a bit melodramatic (just not my taste), and it has several grammatical errors!.

i!.e!. comma-splices!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Made me want to cry!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. because it's true!.!.!.!. Too True!.Www@QuestionHome@Com