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Planks of flooring
creek their warning
steps foretold
soft, shoeless and
I, clueless
who is coming
cold unloving
come to stare
comes uncaring
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Planks of flooring creek their warning steps foretold soft, shoeless and I, clueless who is coming cold unloving come to stare comes uncaring *****Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Oh my gosh, this is so chilling!. Since the interpretation is left so open, it is easy to translate the meaning to a personal one, which is very scary!. This is quite an amazing little poem!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh, this needs more!.!.!. slowly opening the door!.!.!. and it can then be anyone -- a vampire was my first thought!. Just rambling where my thoughts took from your poem!. I must be in vampire mood!. ***** Mirabella is here touches my tear kisses my neck a gentle peck oh there is blood she sucks the tiny flood then give me a drink I choke, swallow, think cannot think in my haze I live in dark, no longer in days!. I hope I haven't insulted you, but your poem sparked my own from yours!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Not slow!. This is really good but if it were my poem, which it isn't, I'd cut it at "coming!." Then it would be more than a diamond in the rough!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Planks have a life of their own warn us of imagined dangers like that little man upon the stairWww@QuestionHome@Com Interesting and I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Taint sneaky snake!. He don't squeak the floor planks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The dog!? Can't be wife or you have penned your last! lolWww@QuestionHome@Com This is one of those you read a couple times to get a feel for the several meanings it contains!.!.!.good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com Always leave 'em begging for more!.!.!.or less!.Www@QuestionHome@Com very short but with a lot of meaningsWww@QuestionHome@Com |