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Question: Last poem for tonite!.I'm beat!. How does this one work!.!?
"4ever"


Dreams of me
holding you,
underneath a
bruised yellow sky!.

Painiting of a
world soon lost!.
Time ceases,
you question why!?

Together through
an endless night!.
Beneath a Hunter's
cold full moon!.

The secret held,
behind my eyes!.
I am desperate
to reveal to you!.

Remember Heaven's
potent scent!?
And my icy
golden touch!.

If only you
could understand!.
If only I
could get a hunch!.

Listen to your
ancient heart!.
Midnight chills,
they wait for you!.

Within the cold
and in the dark!.
You were there,
I felt your heartbeat!.

Through the dark
look for the light!.
And forever
you'll be mine!.

Everything that
I could never say!.
One last beath
I slip away!.

Join me in
one black embrace!.
We dance upon
our graves!.

We spill the light
in sacrifice!.
While Satan
spasms with delight!.


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is awesome, amazingly good, so many things you can't reveal!. I think I totally understand it!. And if I do, I dare not think of the meaning of the last two verses!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this poem is confused and disoriented!. Your imagery is strained by your desire to connect opposites and thus your logic becomes lost and the idea is killed off before you can develope one!. It is good that you are quitting for the night!.
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Sorry, this one is a loserWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wonderfully written!! I enjoyed reading this one!! I would love to read more of your work!!Www@QuestionHome@Com