Even though Dark is best, I rewrote this. Is it better than the first.?

Question: Even though Dark is best, I rewrote this!. Is it better than the first!.!?

"lost 2"

Despite your assurance,
you bring me to my knees!.
I now see without my eyes,
Screaming for release!.
Outstretched,
spent of all strength!.
Relying on only you,
shredded of all I knew!.
Grasping for the summer breeze,
the chase is through, I'm done!.
I cry out to be with you,
without you i am through!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

its a great poem!. keep writing!. dont let anyone put you down saying its EMO or BAD!. everyone has their own way in expressing themselves!. i find dark poems interesting becuase i feeel what you guys feel!.
keep writing amazing poetry:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

hmmm, you didn't give me enough clues to figure out which addiction you were chasing in this one!.!.!.!.I give up!. You win!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No!.!.!.Dark IS best!.I hate sappy "love poems!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good poem!.!.carry on steveWww@QuestionHome@Com

nice! its interesting in its own way!.!.!.!.!.!.!.and no poem is really emo like ppl would consider this so i like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com