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Question: Do u like my friends poem [NO it is not mine]!?
My bestest buddy is an "aspring poet" and she wrote this poem!. she just emailed it 2 me and she doesnt think its good but I wanted 2 C what u think
Blood leads to tears
It causes many fears
Out by the flame
You know life is no game
Hearing the taps play
You wish a super hero would save the day
Fallin leaders everywhere
it really causes quite a scare
all they wanted was peace
but now they're gone I've lost a peace of me
she's not done!. i think is a little dark for my liking [id never tell her that] but i'd like to see what you think!. she wants the message to be about violence and why its wron or something like that!. it kinda directs to MLK bu mostly RFK!. if u like It i'll have her write more!. she's kinda emo btwWww@QuestionHome@Com
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That's awsome! Better than I'd ever do!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
To tell you the truth, its could use work!. It doesn't flow properly, as in the syllables in the lines are off; metering!. And your friend needs to make all the lines rhyme if it's gonna work properly!. Sorry about being harsh about it!. lol, I hope it really is your friends and not yours!.
PS!. If shes emo you prolly shouldn't tell it the way I didWww@QuestionHome@Com
I like it, it is way better than I could ever write!. My only suggestion is it needs to flow a little better, but who am I to judge!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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I do not understand what it being said!. I wonder if I am not focusing enough about the poem!. Maybe I will reread the poem for clarity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hearing the taps play!.!.!.not really sure what that part is!.!.!.does she mean tapes!.!.!?
fallen leaders!.!.does that mean like people in Iraq and stuff!?
idk over all its good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com