Do u think this is a good poem for a poerty folder?

Question: Do u think this is a good poem for a poerty folder!?

Beautiful mountains
Rivers a dark sea green
Glittery snow cover rocks
Trees with white frost over top
Glittery white snow everywhere!.

i wrote it is it okWww@QuestionHome@Com

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eh, its ok!. somethign still missing:)
i like it tho!. i can actualy see what your writing:)*imagination is great:)*
put a comma after rivers though:)
i think its good for a poetry folder!. it just needs a little more writing:) keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You should change the last line because you already used the adjective glittery!. I think it would be better with more imagery!. Keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ya its OK!. But add a few more lines and some more ryming words!. It kind of didn't make sense!. yo should change the last part :Glittery white snow everywhere" But ya its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com