A poem maybe youd like to rate?

Question: A poem maybe youd like to rate!?

Sitting on my front steps
Thinking of you
Watching the sunset
Go out of view

Now its gone
Nothing in sight
The days are too long
It turns to night

And we look
At the same night sky
Hoping, maybe
The sun will not rise

So we don’t have to spend
Another day apart
We are not friends
Since you broke my heart

But I know I’m on your mind
Im doing fine
I just seem to find
That your also on mine

i havent added punctuation and edited yet i know the flows a little off but please tell me what you think of the poem itself

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

9!
its really nice, it gives the feeling of sadness, yet when you say that u r also on her mind its a little like AHA!
lol
i like it a lot!
specially because its from a guy!. most of the time they have atough time expressing their feelings like this!.
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I think it's very nice!.!.!.and the flow is wrong because your "meter" is off!.!.!.!.!.

Since you are writing in rhyme, the flow will improve if the meters are the same like first and third lines, and second and last!.

or make the last line the same meter to end each verse!.!.!.!.!.

It also doesn't quite make sense that "we don't have to spend another day apart"!.!.!.don't you mean that "it's sad you have to spend every day apart!?"!.!.!.

It's really quite good!.!.!.!.!.!.I love to write poetry too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow that is amazing!!! I can kinda relate to it too!. It even reminds me of a song (the line: hoping, maybe the sun will not rise)!. So, I rate it 10!!! Please write more that was awesome and the funny part is that I don't really like poetry lol!. Thanx again for that wonderful poem!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I know this is against the rules, but!.!.!. 11! It is really, really good! I love it and it has meaning!. Great work!

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Wow i actually really like it, i give it a 10!. But maybe that just because i feel like i can relate to what you are feeling!.!.!. but anyway i really like!Www@QuestionHome@Com

what happened to rythem and depth in poetry!? everything is the same shallow garbage, it'll be a miracle if a good poet shows up again!. oh!.!.!. but yours is good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

prolly an 8 withought all the punctuation and whatnot

Not many people appreciate ryming poems nowadays, clearly though we all know they rock the socks off any other non ryming poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you should change it up like you said because it was a little off but that was pretty good!. I wood it a 9 or 10

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It is beautiful :)

Although the lines are short, it sounds really nice!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

plagerizimWww@QuestionHome@Com

7 or 8 you dont need puncuation the lines do it for you

DONT CHANGE ANYHTING!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

don't worry about punctuation!.!.!.that's what lines are for!. I'd say about a 7!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

7 needs lots of editingWww@QuestionHome@Com

2!.

2 = 2/10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

8!.9, very good!. i applaud you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

9, it has good ryming, but there is a little missing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

omg amazing!!!! ;)
dont change anythingg! so an 8!.5 or 9!.
you have talent, good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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i rate it a 7Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's really good! 10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

7!. i really like it! the 5th stanza kind of throws it offWww@QuestionHome@Com

i wish i could give an 11!.!.but ill give 10!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i would say 9!. it is very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

awwww so sweet i love it!. 8!.5-9Www@QuestionHome@Com

i give it a lucky 7Www@QuestionHome@Com

i give it a 9!. its gud!Www@QuestionHome@Com