See, Dark is best for me. I like this alot, what do u think.?

Question: See, Dark is best for me!. I like this alot, what do u think!.!?

"lost"

Despite your assurances,
you bring me to my knees!.
I now see without my eyes!.
Screaming for release!.
Outstretched, spent of all my strength,
Relying just on you!.
Shredded of all I had,
I breathe a renewed life!.
Grasping for the summer breeze,
the chase is through, I'm done!.
I cry out just to be with you,
You mean the world to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Two recommendations:
1!. Split the line "Outstretched!.!.!." so "spent" starts the second line!.!.!. and
2!. try "spent of all strength"!.!.!.drop the "my", it's inferred!.

Although the last line is a little cliche, I think you can get away with it!.

Not bad!.!.!.keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like "Outstretched" KEEP IT
it makes the next line sound GR8!.!.!.
good work!.!.!.starts off very in depth!.Www@QuestionHome@Com