Critique: Close The Door?

Question: Critique: Close The Door!?

Close the door
I will not be coming back again
I will be traveling to the world of unknown
Flying in darkness
I can' t see
My senses will be numb
I will be sinking in oceans
I will revive and float again
I will be twisted around
I will vanish in the space
I will not be coming home againWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Is this about dying!? Sad!Www@QuestionHome@Com

there is too much "telling" and not enough "showing"Www@QuestionHome@Com