This is another poem that is aged. I rewrote it once, this is totally different.

Question: This is another poem that is aged!. I rewrote it once, this is totally different!. Comments please!.!?

"sacrifice"

You watched me
destroy myself!.
Slowly, with your drugs!.
Poisoning my veins,
Sacrificing friends!.
For your financial benefit,
your front turned back on me!.
My life I'd have given,
No questions asked indeed!.
Now you mean nothing
the antithesis of friend!.
I'd have walked next to you,
Straight through the gates of hell!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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It's very meaningful!. Past is history!. Until one wants to make a change, no one can help them!. Glad your present days are better than your past!. Okay - I would leave out the first period, the first comma, make second period a comma, leave out next comma!. Something like this!.
You watched me
destroy myself
slowly with your drugs,
poisoning my veins,
sacrificing friends!.
For your financial benefit
your front turned back on me!.
My life I'd have given
No questions asked indeed!.
Now you mean nothing
the antithesis of friend!.
I'd have walked next to you,
straight through the gates of hell!.

However, that is how I read it!. And yes, I like the title!. It is perfect!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Maybe you should title it "Lesson Learned"!.!.!.or "Meaningless
Sacrifice"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I dont think "financial " works in the 6th line!.
Maybe replace it with "for your economic gain" or something!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

touching!.!.!.good poem steve!.Www@QuestionHome@Com