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an "edited" poem!?

I know your with him
And that is that
But look away for a while
As a matter of fact

There has been something
On my mind this year
And at this moment
I truly fear

That it has got the best of me
But you were always there
If you could turn away and see
To speak to you I dare

And tell you whats really
Been on my mind
It’s a little bit silly
But when I see you I find

That no matter what happens
Your lighten my mood
And no matter what you go through
Ill be there for you

I know I just sound shy
And it’s a bit weird
But please let me finish
Because to me its clear

This sounded right in my head
But when I wrote them down
Every word you said
Spoke to me very loud

And told me even though
I dont have a chance
I might as well try
For your romance


not much different but i changed it please rate and any constructive criticism is appreciated!.!.!. not your writing sucks never write again crap!.!.!.

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