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Question: A longer poem - not happy with it but what do you think!?
As I walked the forest one chilly night
An owl descended through the light
It was a stillness that drew me in
To ponder her majestic grin
Many hours passed but I drew deeper still
The black butterfly I followed until
I had lost my ways and all I heard
Unsettled silence as of other world
But calm I remained and took a step
A step too many, for night had leapt

My legs have grown sore and weary
My bird had gone and soul came dreary
And I must have given to a seeking sleep
For the time had lost all its keep
When awoke I was, by a falling stone
Rejoiced I thought to have not be alone
But night had still shadowed large
For the rose bush to feel its wrath
Puzzled I was by the distant shape
That left a misted Earth in wakeWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Why are you not happy with it!? I liked it and often I criticise alot of peoples work!. also long poems sometimes get boring becuase it starts of great and then the writer just gets lazy and waffles on but yours kept its structure and kept the hook!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a real good poem!.!. B happy wid it!.!.! Nice vocab used too!.Www@QuestionHome@Com