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Question: Last of the nite!. Longer than normal!. First rough draft, any help is is welcomed!.!?
"the girl with death in her eyes"


She strutted into my life,
Snapped my head around!.
Dark brown eyes, darker skin,
I'm lost and paralyzed!.

I knew she was trouble,
It was writ all over her!.
She was gorgeous poison,
Deadly as could be!.

She swore just like a sailor,
It only turned me on!.
She knew what she was doing,
Her game was very strong!.

Before I knew it happened,
Trapped just like a fly!.
Moving like a spider,
I knew I was through!.

Got me way too easy,
Smart and deadly too!.
I knew and saw it coming,
Too bad I have two heads!.

Standing like a deer,
Frozen by my fright!.
Had her way and used me,
Then tossed me to the side!.

Took my life and left me,
I'll never be the same!.
Every man encounters,
Their own poison girl!.

The only real difference,
Is the way she leaves!.
Are you dead or alive,
When shes through with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow! I don't have anything negative to say!. This poem is great!. It shows this deadly woman like she was a spider and you were trapped in the web ready to be her dinner!. I don't find it so long!. The only thing I would reconsider it's the title!. When I read it i thought the poem was about something completely different!. I liked the part about 2 heads!. Guys usually think with that head that girls don't have!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow !.!.!.!.its kinda like a spider storyWww@QuestionHome@Com