Do you like my poem!?
Ode to Japanese High School Girls
A poem by a thirty-something man in Tokyo (aka Kogal Poet)
You don’t know,
You really don’t have the slightest clue,
About the world, about the complexities of life,
And you don’t even know…how sexy you are!.
Sweet kogyaru, you just don’t know
That you are our after-school special,
Our 4 p!.m!. fantasy,
Our subway eye candy!.
You don’t know how much we desire
Those bare thighs,
Which you innocently reveal between
Your rolled-up skirt and black knee-highs!.
You don’t know how we wait and hope
To catch a glimpse – just a glimpse –
Of your white cotton buru
As you walk up the steps or ride your bike!.
You don’t know that your purity is perfection,
That your youth is our desire,
You can’t possibly know, because you are oblivious
In your little world of school books, cell phones and shopping!.!.!.
(read the rest of my poem here:
http://www!.soulcast!.com/japanhighschoolg!.!.!. )
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Wow, I read your entire poem in both English and Japanese and it sure lost a lot in the translation!. An ode is a lyric poem, usually expressing exalted emotion in a complex scheme of rhyme and meter!. Although your writing does express an exalted emotion (a person in heat) it lacks rhyme and meter!.
Throughout your poem, you keep giving the impression that the young girls are unaware of their beauty and the fact that they are missing life because they do not give you a second glance!. What makes you think for a moment that these young 12 to 16 year olds are not aware of their sensuality!?
You seem to have some very serious sexual issues if you are impatiently waiting just to glimpse their underclothing!. The girls in the states dress just as sexy or plain as anywhere else in the world!. Many of the girls attending Catholic or private schools dress in short skirts and knee length stockings!.
If you were just describing the beauty of the girls and their culture I would say it was an OK poem!. But, when you start to desire those bare thighs, and their youth is another story!. A thirty-something man thinking that he would be a better lover is make me thing that you have a very high opinion of your self!. If you were that macho, the young girls would be throwing themselves at you and the adults would be kicking your butt!. It doesn’t really matter because you will either grow up sexually or be foolish enough to do something stupid!. Keep in mind that their lolicon culture built on pride and honor may be your undoing!.
Sorry for the negative feed back!.Www@QuestionHome@Com