i can't seem to breathe when i look at your portarit!.
you left me here
bitter and cold
along with cockroaches!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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you left me here bitter and cold along with cockroaches!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: sorry, but i'd say a 3 even if i use the same words i can make it better!. how about this!. i cant seem to breath, when i look at your portrait you left me, here!. bitter, cold, along with cockroaches!.Www@QuestionHome@Com cockroaches is a very "ugly" poetic word -- it does not flow well in almost all poems so I would change thatWww@QuestionHome@Com That's a 3!. I understand where you're coming from, but I feel no connection with the poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com 1Www@QuestionHome@Com I give this poem a #1 for trying!.Www@QuestionHome@Com 2Www@QuestionHome@Com Ill give it a 2!.!.!.!.!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com its nice but u made it short make it a bit longer so its a 6 for meWww@QuestionHome@Com |