Poem i just wrote like 5 seconds ago?

Question: Poem i just wrote like 5 seconds ago!?

Mask in my hand
to hide the real me
I cant stand
That no one can see

The real guy
behind these lies
the one who just sighs
behind the brown eyes

My mind flies
Am i fun!?
Am i the outgoing guy!?
Or the shy and sensitive one

Rough ROUGH draftWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Rough draft, but a great start!

I like the reference to a mask -- and hiding your eyes in the first stanza!.

Then you carry the imagery through as you reveal your eyes, perhaps the mask slips a little!.

Finally, stanza three, needs more work to link it with the first two -- I'd insert a couple more stanza's that slowly reveal the answers to these questions!.

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I love it! it's awesome!Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's nice how it is i thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com