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Question: Poem I wrote when i was younger - What do you think!?
As soon as he spoke those three words
I didn't believe my ears
I never thought we’d feel alike
Looking with his hopeful eyes
He waited long for my reply
Standing there in front of me
With his marvelous faith filled grin
Here’s the best day of my life
I left my spot and hugged him tight
When at last I found my voice
I whispered in his perfect ear
“I love yoyos too”Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I liked it very much!. Very visual, original "marvelous faith filled grin" full of action, but with a charming twist at the end!.
I smiled without a trace of irony!.
More people should read your poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is so sweet and tender, and extremely well written for a light hearted poem!.There are some great lines in here!.!.!."With his marvelous faith filled grin"!. It is truly a pleasure to read something so upbeat and happy for a bit of a change from the regular fare!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I don't know how young you were but it is really good!. I am a poet also and I like how other people aproach situations from a different angle!. good job!. rklWww@QuestionHome@Com
oh my good golly goshness, that is soooooo cute! deliciously misleading!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Awww this is very cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com
Wanna sleep with me!?
-it's a yoyo move, okay!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
thuis is so cute and funny i can just imagine my 4 year old sister saying this to her best 4 year old friend ryanWww@QuestionHome@Com
lmao dats so cute i love dat mind f i take it {lol}Www@QuestionHome@Com