Mother and Father
Spring defends against
winter causes dreams of
flowers cover graves of
parents leave the fondest
memories!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Spring defends against winter causes dreams of flowers cover graves of parents leave the fondest memories!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I think you are doing a repetitive "wrap" on your lines like - "Spring defends against !.!.!. winter" - (again) "Winter causes dreams of !.!.!. flowers" etc!. The meaning is nice but the format is a little tricky to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Puzzled!. Spring defends against winter causes dreams of flower covered graves of parents leaves the fondest memories!. This version makes more sense - but would be better punctuated!. Spring defends against winter, causes dreams of flower covered graves of parents!. Leaves the fondest memories!. I don't like the two consecutive 'of' endings!. And Spring would have to be here first for it to be defending itself against Winter's attack - you have it the wrong way around!. Back to the drawing board, as they say!.Www@QuestionHome@Com It is not one of your better poems!. Spring defends against ------------ what winter causes dreams of ---------- what flowers cover graves of -- this is the only question with an parents leave the fondest -- answer !.!.!.!. memories!. --- Ultimately this is the point of the poem Rewrite and repost -- would love to see your newer version!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Love it! Very creative and unique! :-D did you write it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com umm thats kinda shitty!.!.!. sorry you askedWww@QuestionHome@Com no offense, but it is bad!. you asked!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I don't understand it, which is a good thing! lol its great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |