White Hunter
Sunken depths of darkness
Striking helpless prey
Snatching, severing, savaging!.
Stale flesh from pale white bone
Stricken by rotting fish guts
Savoring, swimming, starving!.
Soul white hunter lured by blood
Shadowing curious delinquents
Silent, scoping, sprawling!.
Searching for its companion
Swarming swollen seas in silence!.
Stranded, struggling, soulless!.
Its not my best that ive written but i wanted to make every line start with the letter 'S' to make it different, i have more poems here
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The alliteration is perfect; it fits!. I get the sense that a large sea creature is searching for its mate -- so I'll guess killer whale -- and the mate is dead!.
OR The great white shark who searches for its mate, and will masticate whatever is in its way; they really have soulless eyes!.
It's good -- the imagery is strong -- and by using the "S" for alliteration you have the sea sliding in waves!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well this IS different!. I do like the whole "S" thing!. Its very creative!. Though the whole poem is kind of!.!.!.!.!.!. strange, it is also very good!. It, to me, is one of those poems that catches your eye!. Keep writing!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com