My Tyburn for your critique, please?

Question: My Tyburn for your critique, please!?

Love’s Game

Prying
Spying
Crying
Dying
Love spitefully prying, spying near
And you bereft crying, dying here!.

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I believe you have done it, if present participles are permitted!. I posted one asking if we can use participles, which are really only part adjective!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well done! These short verse forms are more difficult than they appear!. Wasn't Tyburn Hill where they hanged people in London!?

You followed the form perfectly!. My book says a tyburn is a six line poem consisting of 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9 syllables in which the first four lines rhyme and are all descriptive words!. The last two lines rhyme and incorporate the first, second, third, and fourth lines as the 5th through 8th syllables!.

You nailed it, and it makes sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I do not know the exact rules nor am I likely to try!. This though looks correct and more importantly makes sense!. Love your title also!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've complete given up!.!.!.well maybe!. You nailed it!.!.!.I think!.
Wish Biscuits had not gotten me tempted to try one!. This old brain fried!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it!.
Don't know the rules though!.
Nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely work Granny!. I however do not know the rules!.
who's going to argue with their Granny!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was very lovely!.!.!.!.!.!.tyburns seem really good!.!.!.but at the moment i guess i am running out of tunes to attempt one!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com