What do you think of My Peom ?

Question: What do you think of My Peom !?

My Life

Jigaw puzzle thats my life
Missing pieces I search by night
Pieces I don't want to see
Pieces that won't let me be!.
Put them back one by one
Missing pieces let me see
Just what happened
When I was there

I worte this peom when i was going throw a very bad time in my live what do you think !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

i love it, but change the last word to something that rhymes!. it would help!. i almost thought it read "just what happened, when i was three" =D but yes, it's good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Actually not that bad!. You avoided the drippy sentimentality that kills so many poems!. You do need to work on your spelling though!. Poem and not peom!. Through instead of throw!. Throw is what you do with a ball!. And wrote instead of worte, probably a typo!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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