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Question: My poem "White Hunters" please comment!?
Its only small, and i made every line start with the letter 'S' i dont know if this is a way of poetry but i did it :)
White Hunter
Sunken depths of darkness
Striking helpless prey
Stalking, severing, savaging,
Stale flesh from pale white bone
Stricken by rotting fish
Savoring, swimming, starving,
Soul white hunter lured by blood
Shadowing curious flocks
Silent, scoping, sprawling,
Searching for its soul mate
Swarming swollen seas in silence!.
Stranded, struggling, soulless!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is a way of poetry(writers aften use the term "rhetorical device)!. In addition, you made the sybillant S sound constant throughout each line which makes your poem alliterative!. ancient poets preferred this because it made poems easier to memorize!. Good flow throughout!. Rather liked it overall
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I love it!
I would like to see one more line where the animals find the hunter who has taken the mates and they feast upon him!.!.!. but that is the retribution in me talking!.
You carried off the alliteration to a T!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it !.!.!.congrats!.!.!.it is creativeWww@QuestionHome@Com
like i said about the 1, love your writingWww@QuestionHome@Com