You and me...my new poem....what do you think?

Question: You and me!.!.!.my new poem!.!.!.!.what do you think!?

My life is an open book
And tonight I turn a new chapter
Bypassing all the demons I left behind
This is the start of what is left
I must let my heart go
I must let my pain flow
Now I’m turning around
I am not the man I use to be
Laying here at night
Letting this sickness sink in
My heart grows colder and heaver
Without you here
What I have done and seen
Has become clear
As the pages turn
And the pain of farewell grows
I inhale it all and say
You and me are just
A faded dreamWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Another one of your best :)
I love the visual imagery of open books and turning pages ~ this is a perfect poem for an accompanying illustration!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is so wonderful and so great as the words and the meaning touched my heart as i have been thru this too long ago and it does run the hearty down !.!.With your poetry you can go places and bring us with you' and i have seen you do just this!.!.Bravo for your poetry and for your kindness to bring out the best i have read for a while!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a outstanding poem full of hope and about turning another page in this chapter!. I know how hard this has been on you' and how much you have suffered' and to let is go must of been the hardest day ever!.!.Lots of luck always Cami!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this poem is soooooo good and it is very deep
keep writing more - you are sooo good!!
good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

whoa! thats really good, its deep aswell, i cant do poetry like that, your great at it, keep it up!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well laid out with great images!. I like!. Typo on heaver (heavier)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that is so beautiful!.!. i know exactly how your feeling!.!.

xWww@QuestionHome@Com

Deep and dark, just how I like them!.I find this one OKWww@QuestionHome@Com

hey !! love sick boy

nice poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

it s deepWww@QuestionHome@Com

i don't have any words to explain itWww@QuestionHome@Com

as usual friend well done!!
Excellent use of imagery and symbolism!. I enjoy the analogy where you depict your life as a book and how you are moving on and acknowledging right from wrong and present this in a manner similar to reading or interpretating a book, i!.e!. has become clear as the pages turn!.
I found this to be an ingenuous way of making your poem easier to comprehend and for the readers to fully acknowledge the themes and issues conveyed in the poem which are akin to realisation of the false pretences relationships often hold and how people endure/cope when they acknowledge this!. It is also about acceptance and letting go of a loved one!.
I think you've articulated and conveyed these themes really well!. I enjoyed your use of description/diction too!.
Your inconsistent meter was another good attribute which contributed to the overall excellency of the poem!.
The ending was superlative!!!!
A faded dream and also the line above where the best!. This is a great gift you have, which is being able to summarise your intentions and the issues explored within the poem through a simple clause and phrase at the end!.
A faded dream is an excellent summary!. Faded representing dissipating or going and dream in this case a connotation for an optimistic prospect or blossoming relationship!.
Well done dude, of course!!Www@QuestionHome@Com