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Question: Critique my poem!? However, I won't change!.!?
I behold a vivid country,
With no ruler set as shown!.
With a rising population of,
Thoughts and do's that roam!.
From beginning up till now,
Yet more-so now than then!.
Controversy's stirred up vex
And this country must learn zen!.
Thou shalt teach me discipline!?
But bring color to my eyes!?
Thou shalt show me right from wrong!?
Yet far from picking sides!?
Thou shalt keepeth me from lows!?
But don't keep me long in highs!.
My country's cold to hearts so,
That's born to quickly die!.
I wish to care, on my own
My country I posses!.
Improve and love thy kingdom,
And as do for all the rest!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Either you are so terrified of criticism or you are so sure of your artistic abilities!. Either way, you lose!. I'm not reading it!. Please don't critique my critique, I am not changing it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Who would bother critiqueing it if you arent going to change it!? Are you fishing for compliments!? What a waste of time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!. That's good!. Or at least a whole lot better than I could do!. Fo Sho!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I agree with th first!. kinda point lessWww@QuestionHome@Com