Opiions on my poem please? Opinions only, I won't change my poem.?

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Question:

I behold a vivid country,
With no ruler set as shown!.
With a rising population of,
Thoughts and do's that roam!.

From beginning up till now,
Yet more-so now than then!.
Controversy's stirred up vex
And this country must learn zen!.

Thou shalt teach me discipline!?
But bring color to my eyes!?
Thou shalt show me right from wrong!?
Yet far from picking sides!?

Thou shalt keepeth me from lows!?
But don't keep me long in highs!.
My country's cold to hearts so,
That's born to quickly die!.

I wish to care, on my own
My country I posses!.
Improve and love thy kingdom,
And as do for all the rest!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I liked it, however the meter in the second stanza didn't quite do it for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this poem!. It really makes me understand how hard it is to be a poltican and make decisons!. I really like free verse!. I think that people lose their creativity when they don't write in free verse!. keep up the great work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice poem

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