Inspired by china-dolly 321!.
Let me know what you see, what the poem means to you!.
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Let me know what you see, what the poem means to you!. Lovers Like moths consumed electric o c nv u l s in- g ashes after - images in the bright, blue lightWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: hmm makes u think!.!.!. (thats what i love about poetry btw! haha) to me hes describing "Lovers" as 2 moths which eventually grows and turns into a butterfly!. the "electric" he talks about is that spark of fire or electric felling when u find love!. the ashes is when its almost the end and its sort of dying out like photographs, after they're developed, in a blue light!. idk just my mixed up perception of this intricate poem!. hahaWww@QuestionHome@Com I liked the idea, but the broken text was annoying and hard to read!. e e cummings made a lot of this kind of thing work, but most people when they try that it doesn't work maybe because we're not e e cummings!? I don't know!. for whatever reason!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Its so broken that the meaning is lost in the fragments!. Better luck next time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Makes no sense to meWww@QuestionHome@Com *GONG*Www@QuestionHome@Com |