I have a new poem. Do I have a chance to be one of the greatest poets ever?

Question: I have a new poem!. Do I have a chance to be one of the greatest poets ever!?

Stars Light

I see stars swaying in the sky,
like butterflies
They glitter and produce a flashy light,
like a firefly
They seem to be alive and well,
but I just can't tell!.!.!.
For my vision has a problem,
yes I use spectacles!.

In spite of all these I see,
I strive to be a student!.
Or if I learn to contemplate,
then I won't have to wait!.
Because all the lights I see,
are my imaginings!.
Oh I recall what my teacher said,
that I am mentally incapable!.
Of ever seeing the world,
realistically!.
I cried like a child,
because what I heard hurt me!.
But then my mother,
she stood by me!.

Stars Light,
she is my mother dear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

i can do a better poem than that when drunk!. If you want to become really great you should take up free-style rapping!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i didnt like this until the very end!. & its the sentiment that got me!. the awwww factor!.

but thats not enough!.

continue to work on ya craft & perhaps one day u will be one of the greatest everWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like your style!.
maybe get a collection of your work together and put a few small books together,either give a few away as pressies or try and sell them!.!.!.
good luck with your work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well, you must work very hard to achieve your goal!. This could use a little work!. You have the potential like all creative people!. good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Poets' goals are not to be considered the greatest, they only speak greatly from the heart and soul!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's pretty good!.
It could use some work!.
Keep writing!.!.!.remember with practice makes perfect!.
Nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a pretty good poem and I like it but I don't know!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this sucks
i want my 2 mins backWww@QuestionHome@Com

I didn't like how it started out either, but toward the end it works better!.
writing is 2 jobs - one is like brainstorming, creating, writing - like you did here!.
and it's also editing - where you get rid of the junk and make it as concise as possible!. Remember it's more of an outsider looking inside, not an outpouring of all your emotions inside you!. If you can remember that you'll be a good poet!. It's like taking a picture!.

I see a star swaying in the sky,
Because of all my imaginings,!.
I cried like a child
But then my mother stood by me
The star!? she is my mother dear!

if you publish this, please consider making me a co-author!.
I put a twist on this one!.!.

thanksWww@QuestionHome@Com

Since you want to be a renowed poet I'm going to give it to you straight!.

First analogy!.!.!.!.!.star to butterfly!.!.!.!.!.been done

the line "alive and well but i just can't tell"!.!.!.!.don't force rhymes!.!.!.!.every word must hit!.!.!.!.!.!.alive, well, can't tell!.!.!.!.!.says the same thing why use extra words

For my vision has a problem, yes I use spectacles!.!.!.!.!.is that supposed to be funny!?!?!?!? Rather obvious if you were going for that fact you can't see the world clearly!.!.!.!.saying that would have been more effective!.!.!.or dig for your own metaphors!.!.!.!.i lie in the grass and cannot rise!.!.!.something anything

the rest of the poem is a narrative of some sort and more emotional than poetic!. Use the emotion and find some metaphysical way to express it, or start writing short stories!.!.!. Poetry is hard work!.!.!.that's why I wouldn't call myself a poet!.!.

Keep digging!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com