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Question: Feedbacks on this poem please!.!.!.!?
Hot bloody moon
You sit upon majesty of ice
Attracting witches on brooms
Taking the light of day
And bringing shadows of death that evil obey
You hide behind dark-grey horrific clouds
Accepting rituals from mangy hounds
Giving hails of soprano to celestial demons of fright
To bring their spirits to this stormy hell night

Hot bloody moon
You chill me under the tropical heat of the dark
My head aches
My body shakes
To my beat of heart
As my legs carry me away urgently
My eyes glance skyward
You always follow me
Draw your veil and let us see your face
Your aura of gloom has invaded every space
And it goes together that by your eerie light
One man is murdered in the middle of the night

Hot bloody moon
When you turned the ocean to glittering gold
It was most beautiful to behold
But not your shadow in blood on the ground
With howling winds and siren sounds
Now you catch the waters of falling rain
With your golden glow
They drip from leaves like tears of sad night
And I do not know
Why you complete this grievous sight
Of a man screaming and dieing soWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
whoa, that's scary stuff, but you're a good writer:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good and a bit scary but for me it need a little more spice
its missing a puzzle i dont know when i read it was good but i need something like to heat up and to make it more intersetingWww@QuestionHome@Com

pretty words but the metophors are indescernable!. You need less of them and to discribe the ones you have to there full potential!. Pretty words are no excuse for lack of substance!. Keep up the good workWww@QuestionHome@Com