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Question: The old lady!?
The old lady squinted
At the bathroom wall
She nearly fainted
As she thought she saw it crawl

A green speckled thing
An insect it must be
But it she would not fling
For a phobia had she

Of insects any kind
Large, medium or small
It was engraved in her mind
That they were her downfall

Once she touched a bee
It stung her straightaway
From then on her tee
Never touched any insect any day

She put on her shawl
To the doctor’s she went
When she came back to her own hall
Her glasses she had sent

The next day or two
She would hardly dare
To go to the loo
For that bug was still there

On and on this would occur
Till one day came a call
Her glasses were being sent to her
Straight from the mall

Was she excited like fission
When she could at last see
Forty years of blur vision
Her glasses were her key

What insect was it
The answer she did need
Oh how her thirsty eyes lit
When she saw it was a piece of string indeedWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
a suggestion: 2nd stanza

A thing of speckled green
An insect it must be
to fling it would be keen
but a phobia had she

4th stanza, 2nd & 3rd lines- awkward

8th stanza, 3rd line- should be blurry or blurred

last stanza- end 2nd line with a rhyme for string!. example:

What insect could it be
what foul, dreadful thing
would her new eyes see!?
a fuzzy piece of string!.

I like the poem; just some ideas to tighten it up!.
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Great poem! did you write it yourself!?
Very creative imagination~!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Cute, simply lovely and cute, a star!.Www@QuestionHome@Com