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Question: Could you call this a Rondeau!?
Everything
This love is all that I can sing,
the sun will fall, the sun will bring,
a light only growing brighter,
this the story, you the writer!.
Your whispers are the angel's wing!.
So I will let go now and fling
blessings that mean everything;
I'll lose them if I hold tighter!.
This love is all!.
I won't hold you down with a ring,
and I will give up anything!.
Now it's dark, it will get lighter,
yes, my love, I am a fighter!.
I serve no master, and no king!.
This love is all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Brilliant - no one knows until they try these, but they are so difficult !. The discipline is so tight (having only two rhyming sounds, and the Refrain) that you have to concentrate like billyo - and of course, there is the meter, too and to add to the woes it has to make sense reach a conclusion!.
Try
'convey' instead of 'mean' then it's 10/10 all round
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Yes, it is definitely a Rondeau!. Beautifully written and 99!.9% correct!. Just one observation, "Blessings that mean everything" is missing one syllable!. Other than that, absolutely perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is perfect in so many ways, a perfect rondeau and a moving and graceful poem as well!. The first two lines and the last two lines are brilliant!. I admire and respect all of your work so much!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I know little of mechanics, only sound and heart movements
both have the rhythm of a precious love song here, lovely
work of art!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, it certainly is a Rondeau!. And a lovely one at that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Rondeau's is a grocery store in Cable, Wisconsin!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, for $1!.53 I will call this a Rhonda!.!.!.I mean Rondo!.!.!.I mean Rondeau!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A "round" of applause!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes it certainly is!Www@QuestionHome@Com