CLICK HERE. I'm 14 and lovee writing. Please comment?

Question: CLICK HERE!. I'm 14 and lovee writing!. Please comment!?

You may listen,
but that doesn't mean you hear!.
Ypu may take a brief look,
but all you see is how it appears!.
Yet under that appearance,
ia a vast world of soul!.
Within each being,
there is spirit untold!.
You must delve deeper
than mere physical traits!.
Start with one,
then another, and reiterate!.
Until you can depict
a meaning, so wise!.
Of not judging by the cover;
what only meets the eyes!.
Become one who sees beyond,
and hear the heart's reply!.
It's expressing its graditude,
for accepting its innards!.
For you
will emerge the winner!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Miss Mickey, I am impressed with your control of the language!. U show more poetic aptitude than many far older than yourself!.

I would wholeheartedly encourage U!!

Timothy

:o)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good!.
Remember, with poetry, one of the secrets is to say a lot with only a few words!. That's part of the magic of poetry, and why really good poetry is so hard to find!.
This poem is good, like I said, but it gets a little heavy!.
also, be careful about trying to blend old words like "reiterate" with modern words like "innards"!. Sometimes it works!. Sometimes it doesn't!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That;s great!
I love how you used unusual words to express emotion!.
It stands out among common teen girl poetry, you know!?

Here, I am 14, too!.
Do you mind checking out my poem!?
Sorry, i know its annoying, but if ya have time!.!.!.!.!.!.

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GREAT JOB!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Such wise words from one so young!. There is a place for you young lady in this troubled world!. I am sure that when you have mastered the art of written wisdom!. Then there will be a great voice heard in the land!.

RobertWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's beautiful, your verse is grand
But there's one thing I don't understand
If one is to win, who is to lose!?
It is so hard to choose
And where's a joyous battle!?
Such as when I fought my brother for a rattle!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow girl you are an awesome writer, if you can do that at the age of fourteen imagine how great you'll be in a few years!. (thumb snaps for you)Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW thats great how long have you been writing
dont stop because your poeams will get better overe time
you get a star from meWww@QuestionHome@Com

You have a very good vocabulary, keep up the writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes beautiful and still so grand!
I get it though my brother doesn't understand!
All I say is what I see,
I quite agree with Tweedledee!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's really nice and uplifting!. I'm bad at critiquing, sorry!Www@QuestionHome@Com

cool im 14 to its great that you can write like that keep it going i gave you a star!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thts beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice way to put it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's pretty!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

that is awsum u got sum real talent lots of emotion i could feel it good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com