What does this say to you?

Question: What does this say to you!?

Child’s Mind Fear

I feel left in a shallow pool
of everything that I thought good
of myself
and of my work
Shattered ice beneath my shell
Trees hang down to swoop me up
just out of reach
I’m not enough
These feelings bleed inside of me
I hope to God I’d set them loose
The noose is tied around my feet
a hanged haunting example set
for any who would pas me by
to see the fate that I have met
A wounded soul
A shivering child
A vast wish to be reconciled
A changing world
feel left behind
I have lost my mind
And some say I never had it in the first placeWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Quite frankly, this leaves me uneasy and disturbed!. It takes me back to a sad, forbidding place!. Maybe I am connecting too literally to your words, but be that as it may, this poem is a haunting and soul-searching one for me!. To be so moved by words tells me that they have a lot of power!. What could be more shattering than "a wounded soul!.!.!.a shivering child"!? And the ending is too close for comfort!. You are so gifted!. I hear you!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is truly beautiful!. And of course, you must know what I'm going to say before I actually say it!. "The noose is tied around my feet!." That wouldn't, perchance, be the Hanged Man, would it!. Whichever, I'm getting the really strong image of a skewed perspective, the losing of the mind, as averse to the never having one!. How can you lose what you never had!. Quite potent, my friend!. Quite potent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poem sounds more like someone who feels betrayed, than an irrational childs fear!.
I think that poem itself shows promise, I believe that the feelings are expressed well, will your symbolism!.

However the last few lines seem a little dis-jointed!.
A little polish and you will do well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like a lost soul desperately looking for help and existence is starting to reach out to the soul to try to heal it!. The soul needs to allow the healing to begin and don't care what others think!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is an enchanting portrayal of how we poets often feel!.!.!. I enjoyed how the last line is disjointed, giving it a taste of unease at the end!. You leave the reading with a pleasant poem and an unbalanced ending, which would be amazing if that is how you meant it!.!.!. if not it is a happy accident!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It seems you feel put on display and pointed at for not being good enough at something!.!.!. do not worry, if you are thinking of your poetry, you exceed any of my own!.!.!. I will not put myself down and neither should you!.!.!. in feeling worthless, you write a poem of great worth!.!.!. that should say something!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can see a "hanged man" imagery in your work!. - The Hanged Man symbolizes moments of suspension between physical and mystical worlds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This poem says " I hate that I take myself so seriously, and no one else does!. "

I miss the creative angst of teenager-hoodWww@QuestionHome@Com

What goes down must come up, grow stronger at broken places, survivers do more then survive they live to the fullest!.
BlessingsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Amazing!. You are relly good and A truly talented poet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To me it says:
Just read this and sit back and wait, you ain't seen nuthin yet!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Didn't say anything!. I had to read it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com