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Question: Is this bowing to the Double Acrostic trend!?
To write such a poem!.!.!.

Getaway

Mortal are these heathen modern men
Offering their sacrifice to further their agenda
Towering destruction, they seek to give their rant
Hovering like vultures above both me and you
Entering the greener realm, as gentle as a flower
Receiving peace, away from all their filthy rage

Not sure if I am following the rules… tell me, is it good!? I don’t like it, but I never liked being bound to something like this…

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!. Wow!. Wooooow!. I wish I could say more, but I believe that your radiance is shining far beyond what I have ever attempted!. This is truly beautiful, truly stunning, and an ode to an under appreciated goddess!. Thank you, thank you, thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Entering the greener realm, as gentle as a flower" brings to my mind being wrapped protactively in the arms of Mother Nature, for those of us who wish to seek shelter there "away from their filthy rage"!. This is wonderful, especially as you were confined to this form, which you have mastered gracefully!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It seems to me that the stricture of the form has in no way constrained the seamless flow tat is one of the hallmarks of your work!. Very often these forms cause telegraph lines!. That is, it is easy to guess what's coming, one line will telegraph the next!. You don't do that, and that holds the readers attention so much better!.

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If she says it is!.!.!. then it must be!. I liked it!. For me, it ended kinda abruptly but, beyond that it was great!.!.!.

EDIT: the first part seems to be more about the evil of the world, the second about where we find our peace!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The only rules are to spell things out and you've done a fabulous job!. I absolutely love the content of your poem!. It touches my soul!. Beautiful!.

Try looking at it as being challenged rather than bound!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"Entering the greener realm, as gentle as a flower" - does this mean that they have received absolution for their "Towering destruction" !?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You did it! I like the comparison of "heathen modern men" with the gentleness of Mother Nature!. This is a powerful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Walk alone and I
took a look instead
Frankly, I have no room to talk

Another DA answer, and a bad one at that!.!.!.

I love this style!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Don't care about restriction either, but you met the challenge!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Not sure, but I like the content!Www@QuestionHome@Com

lol!.!.!.!.!.!.your funny, you don't like it!?
I do!.
You did very good on it!.
I like this one a lot!.
Nice work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com