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I have never tried to be perfect, but this is not about capability!. To branch out is to grow, belief and believing!. I am only the limits of my pressures on confinement!. I am only what you see, becoming what you create!. The mind's eye that peers deep is not me, but my definition and perception!. The poet will ever be journeying, but will always return to hearth fires for the soul is anchored in the body!. And I am a creature of comfort!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: HA! Fabulous!Www@QuestionHome@Com It is nice that you try but your quandary is that people can read you wrong even though it is not you!. But as any soul who ventures forth their must be an anchor, a resting place to replenish!. You threw me with the twist at the end, which was refreshingly honest!. My critique would be to make it more esoteric at the beginning to draw them into your comments!. This easily stands on its own!.Www@QuestionHome@Com As is well evident to the return to your origins!.!.!. Do you see!? You HAVE already been to the mountain, and others here, before you went back to Eva as she was, told you that you had never lost what you were searching for!.!.!. The thing is, if you stop searching, that is when you will lose it!. Blessed Be, Siren Unchained!Www@QuestionHome@Com hahaha! you can wave your hand and do anything! and i see you sitting happily in a chair with that new cat!. lol i really like the third line because thats the one that can trick you!. my arms didnt make very good wings!.Www@QuestionHome@Com NO I WILL NOT ! It's perfect! It's from you!. You can always go back later and change it!. I change things I write!. This took six months!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This is the most confusing acrostic I ever read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I am not a great critique!. I see nothing wrong with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I guess I'm not much of a critic; it looks perfect to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |