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Question: Love poem :) x!?
hi i would like any (nice) advice/opinions on this poem - constructive critisism is fine - i am 14:
I want that guy who lives in my dreams,
who tore reality apart from it's seams,
I want that guy who loves me for me,
that guy thats warmer than the carribean sea,
I need that guy to wrap his arms round me,
to feel my waist, sit me down on his knee,
i want to feel that guys touch,
that guys tall, handsome, totally butch,
i long to feel his rough skin on mine,
i can feel his breath, it weakens my spine,
i want to feel his sweet lips pressed against mine,
his gentle touch and roaming hands,
listens to me ramble 'bout life and bands,
i want him to hold me,
i want him to love me,
i want him to kiss me,
to whisper sweetly in my ear,
i feel his warm breath tingling on my kneck,
dreaming about him regularly whilst asleep on my deck,
i wish he'd come rescue me,
stop teasing me, stop taunting me,
for everyone to see,
my heart ache for the love i never had,Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow !.!.!. that is so beautiful and it seems so real !.!.!. itsz almost like you wrote it from the bottom of your heart !.!.!. omg !.!. itsz beautifull im going to copy it down IN YOUR NAME -- NO PLAYJERISM lol !.!.!. promise it is the sweetest thing !.!.!.!. i feel like your giving it to me becuz thats exactly how i feel bout sumwun !.!.!. it relates to so many things !.!.!. aww man its pretty !.!.!. perfect !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. i lov it
and whoever dusnt believe you did that !.!.!.!.!. take it as a compliment !.!. you are young only a year yunger than me though ill be turning 16 next month and imagine how in a few years youll improve !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. itsz the best !.!.!. i wish you cud win something lol !.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. that was very good !!!!!
perfecto!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
*Sighs* How that discribes EXACTLY how I feel!. Oh man!.!.!.Thats really good!.
Would you mind if I print it out and redo a a TINY bit!? If I repost it, I will give you full credit and everything!. I really like it!. I would just like to add some of my personality to it!. It up to you!.
Thanks for sharing, kudos for you!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's lond but good, and sweet I love it!. keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com