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Question: My poem titled Destiny, short poem but deep meaning!?
Destiny

Our hero, rest in peace legendary one
for your place is in waiting, the ends finally come!.

Your existence now depleted a soul has arisen
golden gates open wide set pass by life’s freedom!.

One of life’s treasures sunk to depths of a heart
an end of celebration for your spirit can depart!.

A respective soldier in our hearts you will stay
fond memories fortuned, silenced by your passing everyday

Like a night of jewels expressing light beautifully
shine as I envisage your smile, for it’s a miracle to see!.

May your presence blow with the wind for listeners to hear
break through the clouds as your destiny is near!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
AWSOME!!!!
nice rythm and a great poem!.!.!.!.^-^
I likey!.!.!.XD Its a really GREAT POEM!!!!


ps!.!.!.
I am scared by that guy who wrote before me!.!.!.!.LOL!.!.!.!.XD
just random!.!.!.!.XP


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(?!.·′ (?!.·′ * Miyuki*Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poem's not bad, but you use too much flowery words to decorate it, and this obscures the meaning from the readers!.

Try again next time using simpler words and you might just get a better overall effect:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, this is really impressive!. You are an awesome poet!. *glomp*Www@QuestionHome@Com