Something different, did you like it?

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Question:

The leaves rustle
The autumn pulls
In the shadiest of comforts
The greying colours
Swirls of Earth and the stale air
A chirping creature wet and pale

But brown fades away and icy storms
Fills my heart, a wind blown shore
The tree tilts, cries with pain
A comfort of raven
In lands in vain

Soon it melts and rays shine through
A Phoenix reborn , from ashes to gold
Wakes from her sleep, a little frog of snow
My weeping willow seeps no more

The eagle high
Atop the clouds soaring bold
A white retreat, a sun nesting tall
Sipping juice, in a feathered pillow
Like stars, the sparkling greens
My life, these passing seasonsWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Great images, although here definately, need more to make the poem!. Your first stanza caused me to pause and lose interest!. Then you jump to rebirth!.!.!.etc!. A tall order to accomplish is a single poem!. Perhaps two are in order!? Loved the line: the tree tilts, cries with pain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

whoa!. I love it!. TT_TT

i try to write poetry too, but so far my pitiful attempts have not resulted in anything half as good as that poem!. n_n'

i applaude your ingenuity!. i think i'll just stick to writing songs!. ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com