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A Fathers’ Death Bed
A word of hurt
On dying ears
The day’s cold light
The breaking pain
Walking away
From deaths dark bed
Never saying
“I’m sorry dad”
No remorse
On outer arms
But deep within
He died of guilt
No more chance
To give his love
To the one
Who gave him birth
They both are gone
And he was wrong
But pried held back
His hearts embrace
To give him life
Without forgiveness…
Not sure about the name, if you have any ideas then pleas give them… this is something I have always feared happening!. I don’t know if this is a good poem but recently, I have stopped caring and simply wrote what my heart felt… if that is a crime, arrest me!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Another haunting melody from our darling Rouxe!.!.!. worry not, I have feared it too!.!.!. until it almost happened!. I have said my goodbyes and we parted on better terms!.!.!.
Blessed BeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Call it!.!.!.Apology, for while it isn't, it also is!. This is a very elegant simplistic work for you, and I'm glad to see it without all the thrills and chills that you normally add!. It's like staring at a gun point blank!.!.!.beautiful and feral!. The last two lines are chilling!. Love you, Rouxe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I hope writing about something you so greatly fear proved a catharsis for you!. It is a wonderful poem deep with pathos and meaning!. I applaud you in sharing something of so personal a nature; it takes courage to do so!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a lovely poem with hope and sadness' and i wish i could of did these things when my mom passed but maybe in another place ' another time!.!.,!.,Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its pretty deep!. I like the name!. However, how about!. Life - The preludeWww@QuestionHome@Com
name it priedWww@QuestionHome@Com
this is very nice!.!.!.!.elegant and honest!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
On outer arms - I don't understand this line!.
Who died of guilt!? (the father)
Who has no more chance to give his love!? (the father or you)
Who is the one who gave him birth !?(must be father)
He was wrong!? (father or you)
But pride held back his heart's embrace!? (father or you)
To give him life (father or you)
I'm sorry Rouxe this is too difficult to figure out!.
Couldn't you change it to so that we know of whom you are speaking!.
A word of hurt from me
On dying ears!.
The day's cold light!.
The breaking pain!.
My walking away
from death's dark bed!.
Without saying
"I'm sorry, Dad"!.
I felt no remorse
(on outer arms)!?
But deep within me
I died of guilt!.
No more chances
to give my love
to the one
who gave me birth!.
Now both are gone!.
And I was wrong,
but pride held me back
from that last embrace!.
To give me life
without the need
for forgiveness
This is how I interpret the poem - but I may be wrong in places because of the confusion mentioned above!.Www@QuestionHome@Com