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Question: Wahat do you honestly think about this poem!? Does it suck!?
Through the Flames
You are leagues away
Sending messages in code
Oh if I could send Morse code to you
Or a telgram,fax,e-mail,letter
But all those ways would fail
Because you are so far away in Heaven
I would try to meet you there
But one day you denied me
And cursed me to the pits of Hell
I haven't sinned but hear I lie
Little demons picking at me with their
pitchforks and knives
I am without that long hair
That you loved to run your fingers though
When I first arrived the fires burned it off
I look above and wonder
Why all those decades ago
You denied me behind my back
thinking that I would not hear
So what the words still hurt now
through the flames my anger
Is not completely burned away
I tried to exit through the gates
But my hands were chopped off
Before I could touch freedom
Crying out in anger
I wonder if I had you!.
What I mean't to say!.
Your face and name are only
what I have left of you
You are a cheerful angel in heaven
But ever since we paWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is depressing, but I understand why!. I'm sorry to hear that!. But otherwise this poem is good!. I've read quite a bit that was in this kind of mood!. It seems like people are able to write easier, longer and quicker when they are in certain moods than others!. Keep it up!. Good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Kind of depressing and sticatto but It's pretty good!. I wouldn't say it sucks!. Constructive criticizm: Try to make it flow better!. It's very choppy as it is right now!. Why are you so depressed!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very emotionally moving it doesn't suck at all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com