How's this wonderful poem I wrote?.....?

Question: How's this wonderful poem I wrote!?!.!.!.!.!.!?

Well don't think I'm a total freak for writing this, and it's not like I really think it's that good!.!.!.!. but what do you think!?

The seagulls eat the flesh
because it's so fresh!.

The blood the blood
is a deep flood!.

The pain the pain
goes down the drain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think that, its shockingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Not good!. Nothing tells a story or makes sense!. You have concentrated on rhyming rather than choosing a subject and explaining to the reader what you mean by your statement!. Never leave a statement and then NOT go on and give some examples!. Poetry does not have to rhyme, but give the reader enough information of what you are trying to say so they can use their own imaginations in trying to understand your poem!. Good luck!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hm!. I wonder where the drain element came from!.!.!.
It seems kinda disjointed!.
It's!.!.!.not very good!. Like something you just put together because it rhymed, even though it doesn't make sense!.
Good Luck on your next one! ^^''

You're second one is quite good! I had fun reading it!
Haha, it sounds like my friend and I!.!.!.!.we can't cook to save our lives! xDWww@QuestionHome@Com

You're fine unless you start taking yourself seriously!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

mmm its ok,abit too much detail for this time of morning!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

short simple n interesting!. i like:)Www@QuestionHome@Com