What do you think about this poem(tears)?

Question: What do you think about this poem(tears)!?

I hide my tears when ever I say your name, but the pain in my heart is still the same!. Though I smile and seem care free, there is no one who misses you more than me!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Every1 has gives their openions n no 1 knows what's their behind it!. There's nothing to cry infact it's a time of smile n laughter!. Even when i mises u, i do the same as u do!. We are meant for each other and we will definately meet one day so don't think about how far we are rather think about the day when we will meet and marry!.
I know it's tuff to understand bu jaan we have to do it na!.

sweetu, the words of your heart are very pure!.

"copy kar rahe ho haann"
LuvWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love the sentiment, but not really a poem!. try this!.

I hide my tears,
when i say your name!.
Pain in my heart,
hurts just the same!.
Though I still smile,
and I'm care free!.
I miss you more,
than you can see!.

Hope this helps, and the pain goes away eventually, trust me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You're right, not truly a poem, more of a sonnet!. The rhyme and flow is good, but the rhythm is just a little off!.!.!. however!.!.!. it is easy to find a rhythm since it is so short!. (11, 10, 7, and back to 11 syllables) Whenever is one word, I am sure it was just a typo!. Overall, nice work! You create an easy and intense visual!. Is there or will there be more!? Good luck! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's a poem alright but it's also feelings and thoughts!.!.!.which is what makes up a poem!.i guess you lost a loved one (forgive me if I'm wrong) , hopefully writing poetry helps you get through it!.
good luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like song lyrics! Sounds like you've been through heart break! Keep going with it, I think it needs more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A poem is mostly only about thoughts music are even poems thats why poetry is so good to listen to!. I think the poem is a wonderful poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

theres such thing as copyright so quit stealing weezy's junk!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's pretty good!.
Nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.!.!.I kinda feel the same way right now b/c of they way my bf has been acting lately!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awww thats cute!.!.!.!.I love it!!! ^-^ really sweet and short!.!.!.I like it alot! ^-^ Oh and yeah it would be a bit better!.!.!.ok a better poem if u took dark princes advice!.!.!.^-^!.!.!.lol!.!.!.!.but I still like it!.!.!.^-^ its a good poem and a very sweet one!.!.!.^-^ and yeah I know how u feel!.!.!.!.!.I have been a bit depresed because of some stuff that has happened to me!.!.!.!.but oh weel people must move!.!.!.on eventually!.!.!.!.XP

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I like it for a short poem cliche but lovely, keep on working at your poetry I bet you'll spread the power of your words over the world and make a positive impact touching many hearts!.

Here's one of my poems
Brown eyes brown skin
you take my hand
White skin brown eyes
I take your hand
My lips touch yours as we interact
With such passion our romance blindfolds
The different complexion we percieve from
The beginning but still ina way we acknowledge!.
Our negative surroundings become aware of what
They observe, their eyes filled with condemnatory hatred
Awaiting to strike an obtruding opinion against who we are
And what we do!. The racial comments they shout inflict Without effects, we have immuned to what has been said for Years and the utilization of advice given to us from parents,
Friends, or even kind strangers elicits perseverence to the
Point were it just doesn't matter anymore, fighting was not my option, walking away was my plan beforehand!.Www@QuestionHome@Com