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Question: Critique My Poem: You Stole My Soul!?
You Stole My Soul
Please bring it back
You are nice and sweet
I need my soul back
Your touch is tender
Hand me my soul back
Your eyes have spark
Can I have my soul back!?
It is all over and you have my soul
And now I am in love with youWww@QuestionHome@Com
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I think your Comedic Syntax i amazingly deep!.!.!.!. I thought that it was the most intellegent and comedic thing I hav ever read!.!.!. I commend you!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I understand the purpose of all but one line, that being "You are nice and sweet!." For me, it doesn't seem to resonate well with the rest of the poem, which is actually cute and somewhat deceptive in that you think you're going to be immersed in some emo mire, but instead you're pleasantly surprised by a declaration of love!. Nice work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's beautiful!. only thing that i have a problem with is "you are nice and sweet" i think you could come up with something a little better than that!. i love you poem though!. if you can do this beautiful a job at first, then with this revision!.!.!.your poem will be heavenly!. lovely!. =]SarahWww@QuestionHome@Com
Not awful, but it's not great!. I'd give it a 5 on a scale of 10!.
It's too repetitive for my tastes and hasn't enough meatiness to it to work!. In other words, it's not developed enough to sustain the repeated use of the word 'back'!.
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i really like this!. its a great poem!. its like the literature i loke to read!. stuff that is deep and like depressing to a point!.
still great job!. i enjoyed reading it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its a pretty poemWww@QuestionHome@Com