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Question: Maybe I shouldn't write at night!. Do you agree!?
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Tick-tock, tick-tock
on the piano keys,
trembling in the corner
as the maestro
sings a song
that has no words!.
Don't stop, don't stop,
no longer young,
maybe a whore
to soak up all the pain
that was too controversial
to feel!.
Drip-drop, drip-drop
from the faulty
kitchen sinks
watching that fist
ram into me
again again again!.
Click pop, click POP!
Gun goes off
so does the pain,
siren's blaring
hide from shame,
but freedom is worth it!.
Flip flop, flip flop
tossing in a prison cell,
dreaming death
away from hell!.
Tying noose and
slipping free!.
Tick-tock, tick-tock
on the piano keys,
as I become the maestro
and leap from this world!.
Finally I add words
to the song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!.!.nice!.!.That's probably the best poem about suicide that I've ever readWww@QuestionHome@Com
lol, well then should we wait till morning to answer!? :)
i think all the torturing, beating, & distractions wont stop someone from creating whats in their heart, or even you enduring your own, to get there!.
in fact, some of that might be part of the process!. lolWww@QuestionHome@Com
Disingenuous ca-ca ill becomes you!. Write when the Muse beckons!. She probably hangs out at Evadne's pie-de-Terra all night long!. This one is pretty grim, I don't mind that at all!. If you can write well, you can write about anything well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
in poetry, to make a good one doesn't need the time frame!. Its how you get the ideas from the environment and also when the ideas knocking in to your head!. You indeed see things in diffrent angle!. good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com
No, I disagree completely!!
The whole poem was great (the imagery, especially!), but I absolutely loved the last stanza!.!.!.I wish I had your writing skills!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
No, you should not stop writing at night!.
Excellent!.
Excellent!
I regret your pain but I praise your prose!.
Good work!. Keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Write at night, it becomes you!. This is absolutely brilliant!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
TerrificWww@QuestionHome@Com
rather dark, child, perhaps you should try writing in the morning:Www@QuestionHome@Com