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Breakfast Safari by TD Euwaite The rutted road rolls underneath My old Ford truck as it rumbles We stumble down forgotten paths In search of some more fresh Morchella Mushrooms unlike little Alice’s No daydream in my morning endeavor All I want is some scrambled eggs With sautéed shallots and scallions *****Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Hippie parents to stubborn kid: Now junior, how do you expect to have hallucinations if you don't eat your 'shrooms!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Breakfast at Seward Park ('cause I wouldn't take the bus to Tiffany's) Sitting on the bench, watching thirty something old Chinese men and women performing the slow, peaceful, and exquisitely graceful ballet they call T'ai Chi!. A block North there are Puerto Rican and Dominican teens competing in an almost friendly game of half-court basketball!. Across the street are electronic shops and shops for religious articles and books, the former run by lovably obnoxious Israelis, the latter by frocked and bearded Chasidim - New York City's answer to the Amish!. And at my side, a breakfast from the neighbor hood - a sesame seed bun, una taza de cafe con leche, and something that is God's way of showing His infinite love, cream cheese and lox on a bagel!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Nice work, displaying your typical fine technique!. I like the alliteration in lines 1-2, and the rumbles-stumble rhyme!. The second stanza doesn't seem quite as powerful as the first, though I like the Alice/mushrooms allusion -- I have no suggestions!. As I said, nice work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh, how I miss real breakfasts!. Now, I just have toast!. Your poem is an inspiration to go to the Produce Warehouse and buy some real food, for a change!. Beautiful imagery of rutted road and stumble down forgotten paths!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Well, TD!.!.!.it's 5 in the afternoon now, yet you have succeeded in making me VERY hungry!. I was in the mood for eggs, and I love shrooms and scallions!.!.!.sounds like I'll send someone up to Denny's!.!.!.I didn't buy any eggs for $4 per dozen!.!.!.sorry I just won't!Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh those magic mushrooms of Alice's!. I drive a 26 yr old Dodge Ram Pickup!. It will not give up!. I love puppies and Pickup trucks!. Sounds like an old country song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I like it!. I like the alliteration in the poem!. Lovely!. *snaps*Www@QuestionHome@Com Excellent poem which brings back a yummy childhood memory of picking wild mushrooms (NOT THOSE KIND OF MUSHROOMS!) with my uncle at our cottage and YES! Omelettes for breakfast!Www@QuestionHome@Com When going bush, try Witcherty Grubs with Brown snake washed down with a mug of Billy tea!. Great tucker this!. Robert from Auz!.Www@QuestionHome@Com A lovely poem!. It brought back memories of picking fresh blackberries!. Yum!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Oh, Yummy! In a few months it will be 'room' hunting here!. Omelets delight! Now you've made me salivate!Www@QuestionHome@Com Well, in the meantime I'll just go to IHOP!.Www@QuestionHome@Com fix me a plate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |