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Question: A poem I wrote!?
It was always his decision
It was never mine
Just his fatally bad judgment
That took away my life
I was a good kid I think,
I always watched my grades
I didn't ask for the sorrow
And certainly not that pain
I got into my car and slowly turned the key
I never thought this everyday task would be the end of me
I pulled out of my driveway for the last time
He made sharp turn out of nowhere, turning on a dime
The tires screeched and airbags deployed but it was not enough
For when I cracked open my eyes, all I could see was blood
There was glass in my forehead and almond flavor in my mouth
I couldn't get out of the wreck!. I could only scream and shout
I knew my time had at last come to finally go up above
To see the ones I'd lost, to see the ones I loved
But a voice broke through the shadows
And took from dusk, the dawn
A strong, safe, and steady voice
Telling me to hold on
And as a mother rocks her baby or the waves rock the seaWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I am deeply moved by your poem!.
In the Eastern philosopy, part of growing up spiritually is to imagine your death!. This is certainly worthy of that task!.
It is not clear if you actually had this happen or simply imagined it!. Either way you can treat this experience as a way to experience your impending death!. We never know when that will be, but we live with the hope of fulfilling our dreams, never knowing if this moment is our last!.
Thinking about death is not what westerners usually do!. If you are fascinated by the subject, a very heart warming book is written by Marie de Hennezel called Intimate Death!. You can find it here
http://www!.amazon!.com/Intimate-Death-Dyi!.!.!.Basically whatever experience you have in your life or your poetry is a way to come to terms with death and live more fully!.
You sound like you are aware in a way that you were not before!. You assume less and value life in a different way!. One philospher says "It is all a blessing!." Our job is to look deeper than our own pain or satisfaction and feel what is being given us an opportunity to awaken and grow!.
Freesongs
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A bit too "telly!." Remember: show; don't tell!. Use imagery and metaphors and other poetic devices!. Keep writing though, practice makes perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
get some punctuation and some beakage, some space its too crunched together!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
OMG is this about you, r u ok, omg, that is a great poem, very very sadWww@QuestionHome@Com
Very sad poem, i cried!.Www@QuestionHome@Com