Will you read my poem and offer critique or comment?

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Question:

I'm in love with this form, though I don't know if I do it justice!.

FOREVER WITH YOU

I'll see you in my dreams, my dear,
in slumber you are free from fear!.
Free to relax and hold me tight,
free from losses and free from night,
so let not fall a bitter tear!.

We're flying through the atmosphere,
and plundering a new frontier,
watching the world in a new light,
I'll see you in my dreams

But then the demon truth appears,
and says that you must disappear,
he's taking you away tonight,
and I am not allowed to fight,
I have one comfort, though austere,
I'll see you in my dreams!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Interesting Rondeau!. aabba aabc aabbac
You could rework the first line of the last stanza so it ends with 'appear' instead of 'appears' (you're using perfect rhymes, so 'appears' is off)!.

Still, it shows good development of style and a good attempt at writing a specific style of rhymed poetry!. Nicely done!.!.!.keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its okay, i dont know about improvements =/ maybe make each verse of the poem have the same number of lines so the rhyming pattern is the same!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A magnificent rondeau!. Isn't this a beautiful form!? It sings to the heart and soul!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

and thats all im left
!.!.!.welcoming sleep!.
to see her

you know hearts make the word forever what it is!.!.!.

dreams save everything!.!.!.everything!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Awwwwwwww I see you in my dreams!.!.!.How sad meh I like it !. It's all rhymey rhymey and lovey dovey fluff fluff!.!.I want to be with you forever!.!.*sigh* forever is a very long time!.!.!.Can I keep you!? You can live in my closet!.!.*gasp* You could be my own personal closet monster! Yea!Www@QuestionHome@Com